Practice Writing – 4 – Students’ choice of classes

In some school, teachers decided what classes students must take, other schools allow students to select their own classes. Which system do you think is better and why? Include details and examples in your explanations.

Collected by Mạch Nguyện Minh.

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10 Responses

  1. Today, the world is changing and everything must be stimulated. Education is not an exception. There are many ways to do this business. In most western educations, students can choose their own classes while they may not be alowed to do this at some other schools. As a student I believe that most of us want to choose our own classes. Therefore, I prefer the second system which I can select my classes.
    Selections depend on human’s habits and hobbies. They may not be interested in what somebody else choose for them, therefore they can not work as well as they can. For example, a student may good at maths but he can’t follow that class because it is not in the list of the school. He has to study biology which he doesn’t like. Of course, he can not get good marks in which subject doesn’t fit to his hobby.
    Secondly, everybody has their own ability. The school absolutely can not understand exactly each student. They can not know who are able to study in classes they have chosen. It must be a waste of time for those who can not afford to these classes. They can use that wasted time to learn more about some other things they are prefer. Do you agree with me?
    The third reason is that students want to uphold their talents. They may not be as creative when they study subjects they don’ like as they can. Me, a Vietnamese student who used to study at a Vietnamese highschool thought I couldn’t be as creative as I can until I changed to an international school. I can choose my own classes and learn subjects I like. That is chemistry. Now I can make my own substances that may be useful as my teacher said.
    Generally, I think the second system is better for students. Some people may agree with me because of the reasons I mentioned above.

  2. Studying plays the very important role in the future of students. Deciding what courses to take is the first and the necessary step to study well. As a student, I really want to choose my own courses.
    Firstly, the results of our studying are depend on the courses we take. It’s quite obvious that we can have the good results if we can choose the courses we like. If you have to study some courses that you don’t like, you can’t concentrate well on these and I think that you can’t get the good results corresponding to your ability. For example, you dislike and you have to study Geometry. Then you can never do the homework, the assignments well because you simply dislike it. This will affect your final result.
    Secondly, when you choose your own courses, you will be more responsible with your choice. The courses you take is your own decision, not your teacher’s. So you will concentrate more and also have more new ideas. The result is that you’ll be happy, confident and creative. Obviously, you’ll have good results on these courses.
    The last reason is that you’ll be more indepedent. Although our teachers are good and helping us a lot, we shoudn’t depend on them. We have to have our own choice. We need to be independent people.
    Totally, I think that the second system is better for students. We will be not only more independent, responsible but also happy and creative. And with our choices, we’ll get good results and bright futures.

  3. You guys must fill your names before sending your essays, please.

  4. To the fist one:
    “a student may good at maths”->”a student may be good at maths”, “may” is a modal verb, so it needs a main verb.
    As I know, “subject” is only a countable noun so it requires an article or determiner for “subject” in your sentence: “in which subject doesn’t fit to his hobby “->”in which that subject doesn’t fit to his hobby”
    “The courses you take is your own decision”->”The courses you take are your own decision”
    “The school absolutely can not understand exactly each student. They can not know who are able to study in classes they have chosen.” so the first “They” refers which one? and how about the second one? because I don’t see any plural noun in it. Although we can use “They” instead of “he/she” when we don’t know exactly the gender of “subject”, in this case, I think we cannot. Am I right?
    “Me, a Vietnamese student who used to study at a Vietnamese high school thought I couldn’t be as creative as I can until I changed to an international school.”-> I think you want to say about “Me”, but I think this sentence is not right. I suggest that you can change to that “Me, a Vietnamese student who used to study at a Vietnamese high school thought I couldn’t be as creative as I can until I changed to an international school, is an example.”
    “Some people may agree with me because of the reasons I mentioned above.”->”Some people will agree with me because of the reasons I mentioned above.” because modal verb “may” is not the good use for asserting idea.

  5. One more Anonymous Essay I will change the Comment’s options to “Name and email address required”🙂

    Phi, your English writing skill is improving. Currently I am super busy, won’t have time to “take care” of this blog so often. Hope that everything will be fine a month later🙂

  6. To the second essay:

    “…. on the courses we take. It’s quite obvious that we can have the good results ….”-> we can use conjunction to make this sentence to be better like this “Firstly, the results of our studying are depend on the courses we take. Hence, It’s quite obvious that we can have the good results if we can choose the courses we like.”

    “the results of our studying are depend on the courses we take” I think you wrote wrong grammar here -?”the results of our studying depend on the courses we take”

    “Then you can never do the homework, the assignments well because you simply dislike it.” You should NOT use comma if you list just 2 things, you must use and instead of comma. So, I change your essay like this: “Then you can never do the homework and assignments well because you simply dislike it.”

    “The courses you take is your own decision”->”The courses you take is your own decision” because “courses” is plural noun.

    “Although our teachers are good and helping us a lot, we shoudn’t depend on them.”->”Although our teachers are good and help us a lot, we shouldn’t depend on them.” It must be a parallel structure, you misspell “shoudn’t”🙂

    You should read in this link https://englishstudyforvms.wordpress.com/2007/06/19/practice-writing-2-teenager-students-and-part-time-job/
    to know how to write the conclusion of your essay.
    This is what they wrote in that link “I believe we should not use “Finally”. With “finally” readers will understand that you are about to state your 4th reason rather than the conclusion. So “With all my reasons above,” is enough to inform the readers that you are about to conclude.”

  7. I hope everybody help me to correct my essay. Thanks.
    Topic : In some scool, teachers decide what class students must take, other schools allow students to select their own class. Which system do uoi think is better and why?

    According to the development of the recent society, the young are unstopped studying. They always carefully choose fields and knowledge which are necessary for their future. Therefore, I completely agree that educating system where students are allowed to select their own class rather than one where teachers decide.
    The first reason I think students should decide from among ranges of classes is appropriate their heartfelt aspiration. Are they to learn in their favorite class, it is easy to rapidly gain knowledge. School is able to make good condition for students express their talent. For example, my girl friend has a passion for music. Attending in music class, she immidiately shows her ability and becomes better everyday. On the contrary, she in Physical class is not confident and not be fond of her course. For this reason, her studying ability is decrease day after day.
    Another thing I believe is also an important cause for free selecting class is not waste a great number of things to force student study unnecessary, such as time, money, effort, ect. Unsuitable learning clearly wastes time, money as well as effort of both teachers and students. Instead of waste those things a lot, the students can gain effective in studying what they are extremely fond of or want to know.
    In conclusion, to gain knowledge effectively and not to waste time, money or effort, student should study what they are crazy in. That is why I consider school need allow students to decide which class they want to attend. And they will be responsible for their decision.

  8. “According to the development of the recent society, the young are unstopped studying.”

    I think in English, it should be written as:

    “With recent development of the society, young people keep studying continuously.”

  9. Thx 4 any comments you may have for me!🙂

    Optional and compulsory classes own their distinctive advantages that either of them can be replaced by the other. However, the act of choosing your favorite courses do not really benefit you as expected. And despite my getting behind in some weak fields at school, I still prefer the teacher’s decided syllabus used in the time being.

    First of all, I should quote the famous saying “No pain, no gain” as my first point. Many high school students tend to concentrate all their energy on the best-graded subjects and needless to say, those would be their certain choices for majors in a self-selecting-class system. Unfortunately, just persisting to what you are already good at is more or less meaningless! What will happen if an Math-specialized student cannot produce a complete essay in their mother-language? Should the Physical Education be crossed out of a bookworm’s timetable at school? Every aspect of teenager’s development should be paid equal attention and any neglecting will surely result in undesirable problems. By taking part in different courses and activities, we can self-discover our strengths or weaknesses, foster potential abilities and sharpen the chosen focused one.

    Secondly, compulsory subjects play their role as the base for your further knowledge and understandings. You may not like sciences and intend to become a tourist guide in future. Without doubt, communication skills, fluency in foreign languages are what you supposed to be necessary in order to fulfill your dream. Pitifully, the ability to organize an interesting tour, arrange the time and destinations as well as save your customer’s money need a clever mind that can only be trained through years coping with logic problems at school.

    Those are the reasons why I choose to have classes decided by my wise teachers. They truly know what I need, not just what I like. Such good preparations promise to help me succeed in the days ahead.

  10. In my opinion, students should be allowed to choose their own classes.
    First of all, it allows the students to do their best in the subjects. their love for the subjects can motivate them in their learning. in addition, i don’t think it is a good idea for teachers forcing sudents to enter somes classes, it only leads to dissatisfaction and boredom in learing.
    Secondly, everyone has their talents in different fields. for example, a student can be very good at art subjects such as music, painting,…while he can hardly understand a thing in math classes. therefore, it is the best for students to choose which classes to attend because they are the ones who understand themselves most.
    Finally, by letting them make their own decision, you can teach them to be responsible of themselves. That way, young childrens will become more decisive and mature.
    In one word, it is a good thing allowing students to choose their own classes. not only will it offer them chances to develop their talents but also teaching them the way to take responsibility and become better people.
    So, that is my short essay about the topic. Please, fell free to read and give me some feedbacks so i can improve my writing skill. Thank guys!

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