Writing practice – 3 – Reason for attending college

Let’s try a classical topic,

“People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.”

Collected by anh Thống from ETS website.

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20 Responses

  1. Hi, I want to write an essay for this topic. I have completed it in over an hour. I will be very happy to receive your comments. Thanks a lot.

    “People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.”

    It is a general fact in almost every countries in the world that after graduating from a high school, there is a large number of students who want to continue their studying at a university or a college.
    So was I. When I completed my education at a high school, my dream as well as my purpose is becoming a student at a university. In my opinion, it is easy to understand why so many students try to attend a university or a college.

    First, studying at a university is the best way to prepare for your future. It is common it takes you about three or four years to study at a university. If you do your work well, you will receive a certification and become a bachelor. With this certification, you will have more chances for a good job. A certification from a university has an important role in convincing the employers about your ability. Especially, it is wonderful if you have a certification of excellent or outstanding rank. Finding a promising job with high salary is in your touch, and I am sure that a bright future are waiting for you.

    My second point is that a university provides you a lot of useful knowledge. I want to mention to academic knowledge. With some fields, for instance, mathematics, history, philosophy, literature, it is undoubted that you can get knowledge in these fields from nowhere except for the universities or colleges. But more important, universities are the places that you can learn about some very important skills necessary for you. Through the discussions in class, you will know how to present an issue for other people. You also have many out-campus activities at a university through which you will have many chances to interact with other people. You may be more confident after those events. So, not only do the universities provide you academic knowledge, but there are also the places where you can train yourself to become a successful person.
    Although there have been many controversial opinions about the role of the universities and colleges recently, I strongly believe that they are the best environment for young people.

  2. I would like to join this topic.

    I think the universities provide us a lot of neccessary things that we’ll need in our lives. They provide us not only the knowledge but also the experiences and the ways of working. So that, it’s easy to understand why so many pupils want to attend universities.

    Firstly, the universities are the very good environments for us to improve our knowledge. When attending the universities, you can study a lot of attracting courses such as Maths course, Physics courses, History courses, … So that you can improve your knowledge in a lot of fields. Furthermore, the universities have many exelent professors and you can learn a lot from them. Some good students can also do research with them. You’ll need these knowledge in all of your life.

    Secondly, the universities also provide you many activities to improve your skills. Through the activities, you can learn how to work in group, how to convince the others, … These skills are really neccesary for you in your career. When you go out into your life with these skills, you can find some really good jobs with high salary and you’ll succeed.
    The last reason is that you’ll have a lot of friends in the universities. They not only help you in your studying but also give you the motivation to improve your self well. They also can be the working partners of you in the future.

    You can see that there are many good reasons and motivations to attend university. We’ll be better and have a bright future when attending the universities.

  3. I think they say “bachelor degree” more often than “certification”.

    “out-campus activities”–> extracurricular activities

  4. Mạn phép góp ý
    -mention là ngoại động từ, do đó kô có đi kèm với giới từ ‘to’.
    -khi liệt kê đừng nên ghi dấu … (3 chấm) mà nên ghi ‘and so on’.
    -Trước khi gửi bạn nên dùng spelling check của word :d
    Góp ý sai thì xin lượng thứ😀

  5. Góp ý tiếp:
    -Especially không nên dùng ở đầu câu. Chi tiết bạn tra từ điển Oxford

  6. Ở bài thứ hai mình nghĩ ở một số chỗ không nên dùng ‘the universities’ mà nên dùng ‘universities’.
    (Am I stupid?)

  7. Mình xin góp ý: nếu các bạn tham gia gửi bài essay thì nên ghi tên hoặc nickname của mình vào nha🙂 (đừng để Anonymous, lúc sửa bài không lẽ ghi @Anonymous 1 và @Anonymous 2?😀 )

  8. Yeah, I think if you use plural noun, you don’t need use article “the” before that plural noun.
    Another idea is that we should use “university”- just a school, because we talk about “attend college or university”.
    Are they right????

  9. I have some suggestions for the first essay…although I may be repeating what others may have already said (sorry). Some sentences could be easily revised by adding in a word or two, but otherwise, I really enjoyed reading this essay🙂

    Okay here we go:

    1) It is a general fact THAT in almost every COUNTRY (singular)

    2) Instead of writing “there is a large number of students who…their studying “, it would be better to rewrite it as “many students want to…their studies”

    3) So was I –> I was one of those students

    4) When I completed my education at a high school…is becoming a –> When I completed my high school education…is to become…

    5) It is common it takes you about three or four years –> It is common for students to take three or four years…

    6) “Bachelor’s Degree”

    7) Especially, it is wonderful –> In addition, it would be even better if…

    8) Finding a promising job with high salary is in your touch –> …is within reach…

    9) bright future are waiting for you –> is waiting for you

    10) My second point is that a university provides you a lot of useful knowledge. I want to mention to academic knowledge. –> …university provides you WITH useful academic knowledge (in this case, it would be better to take out the second sentence)

    11) With some fields… –> In some fields, such as…

    12) From nowhere… –> From anywhere else…

    13) It is undoubted that –> I doubt that…

    Um…I hope this helps…?

  10. It’s really beneficial to read your comments, uyenle. All of us except you grew up in Vietnam. So we still think mostly in the Vietnamese way. That reflects a lot in our writing.
    Thanks

  11. Hi, i’m going to take a toefl ibt test on 7th july so I want to practice my writting. Leave me ur advices plz^^.
    “Colleague might be called the final step to finish the study time. It is very important to get through this step. This is some reasons that will explain why I think so.
    The first advantage is the chance to get a job after graduate from school. It is more easier to apply for a job with an bachelor degree than if not. Most bussiness organizations require this degree because they want to hire well educated employees.They think that these people can help them to improve their bussinesses more efficiently than those don’t have.
    Secondly, colleague is a very good environment to improve human’s knowledge and behavior. I think it is good because most people who goes to universities or colleagues are good students, they want to study.
    Getting through this step might be difficult for somebody who don’t have enough financial condition. However, I think it will be the best if those people try themselves or get helps to keep on studying.”

  12. plz leave ur advices ASAP cuz I reall need them^^

  13. @Nguyễn hoàng cát:There are some errors in grammar.
    “This is some reasons”-> “There are some reasons” because some reasons are plural noun.

    “This is some reasons that will explain why I think so.”->”There are some reasons that will be explained why I think so.” because I think that you explain why you use this reason NOT the reason explain itself??? Am I right?

    “an bachelor” -> “a bachelor”??

    “People” is plural noun so you have to write “people who goes to universities or colleagues are good students”->”people who go to universities or colleagues are good students”

    “I think it is good because most people who goes to universities or colleagues are good students, they want to study.” -> “I think it is good because most people who go to universities or colleagues are good students and they want to study.”

    “somebody who don’t have”->”somebody who doesn’t have”

    How about ideas of others.

  14. Tiên, to save time, I’ll just copy my comment that I gave Phi and Lâm on about their essays in Topic 1:

    “I’d like to clarify what anh Son said just a bit. What I studied for writing was (you can find these tips in many writing books out there)

    – An opening: Introduction, you main point. (It is recommended that you either agree or disagree, don’t do both🙂 )
    – First reason: State the reason, give some examples or supportive points, conclude it.
    – Second reason: State it, some other examples or supportive points, conclude it.
    – Third reason (if you want to): … same thing …
    – Conclusion : Closing, restate your main point, or if you can, include some opening idea (I’ve never done it before😀 ).
    With each part in a separate paragraph.”

    Other than what Phi has suggested, I’d like to add the followings:

    “Colleague” -> I believe you mean “college”?

    “Colleague might be called the final step to finish the study time.” -> this is Vietnamese way. I don’t know how to fix it😀 Probably some others can.

    “after graduate from school” -> “after graduating from school”

    “It is more easier” -> “It is easier”

    “They think that these people …” -> i think “These people …” is enough. This is a fact, not simply what they think.

    “colleague is a very good environment to improve human’s knowledge and behavior.” -> Again, I know this sentence is not a good one, but I’m not sure how to fix it.

    “Getting through this step might be difficult for somebody who don’t have enough financial condition.” -> Completing the bachelor’s degree (or finishing college?) might be difficult for those with limited financial condition (??)

    “However, I think it will be the best if those people try themselves or get helps to keep on studying.”-> “However, I think it will be good if they can try their best to overcome this problem to complete the degree” I’m not sure about this sentence. Probably others may give ya better advices.

  15. thanx for ur comments, they’re really helpful for me.^^

  16. About one sentence that cat tien wrote: “There were some reasons that…”, I think we should use several instead of some. Because the word ‘some’ indicates something that is not clear.
    Am I right?😕

  17. hai iam going to take toefl exam may 3rd pleas you have any tips say to me.

  18. Hai! I am not an expert to comment however i would like to mention one or two points after having read the above.school education gives ample touch on locality. Boys tend to be closer with their friends based on their nearness to them.Bonding between the two is really sometimes amazing. I have seen people who were friends in schools continue to be so even after their retirement.Of course, schools are the fields where the seeds were sown and to get a good harvest college education is a must.It gives scope for getting jobs,knowledge widening and research advancement.There are people who study for pleasure in university but the percentage isn’t much. To be honest, a large portion of students go to attend college with a hope of better future.

  19. All of us wanna try to become an acedemic student,there are many reason. But I think the most important things is your furture will be better with a degree form a famous university. Now we have to look back the reality of our education, to get more and more students, many universities didn’t care about the quality of students.

  20. please I have this introduction and i want the three budy paraghraps

    The Benefits of a Large University
    For around fifty years, students in several countries have been worried about their studies. The knowledge of students has been increasing with different levels of education that each country gives population. People believe that it was not important but now it is essential in life. It is for that reason the universities did not have request. Nowadays, we can see that universities that have high request are the universities that have been reinforcing their education with new skills of education, technology and has attracted a lot of students and also the opportunities that of gives you in your life. Is important to study the university for your future? Having a good job, getting a high load of education and developing your professional and personal life are the main benefits of a large university.

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